Tuesday, November 30, 2010

Laura Eno's entry

Here is the final entry to my flash scary story contest.

Thank you again to everyone who entered and to all you readers out there. Without you, there would be no point to writing these stories, right? You encourage everyone to keep writing!

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Family Reunion

“Why have you brought me to this place of sorrow and bitter memories?” The man trembled, beads of sweat glistened upon his brow.

“Bitter for you, Papa? I think not, but for them…perhaps.” The serene voice gently chided him.

“What do you want from me, after all these years? Why have you come back?”

“I needed to see you one last time, Papa. You’re tired from the walk. Come sit down for a while. Lean back and rest against Mama’s headstone.”

“We will talk, but not here. It’s late. Please take me back to the house and I will explain if that’s what you wish.”

“You knew they were coming that night, didn’t you? Those men, bent on exacting their blood money, seeking revenge for your mistakes.”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about.” He wondered how she knew.

“I saw them, Papa. I watched them burst through the door, heard them yelling for you to pay up or die.”

“You couldn’t have seen that. You were gone by the time they arrived.”

“Oh, but I did, and so much more. You planned it well. I saw you place the knife in their car. I followed you as you ran next door, lying your way inside.”

“Impossible! You weren’t there.”

She ignored him, continued to speak. “The words flowed from your mouth, begging the police to hurry. You knew the cops would track them down; discover the evidence of ‘their’ crime. How long had you rehearsed such a scene?”

“Don’t bring the memories to life, I beg of you.”

“Do you remember how Mama begged? Can you see once again the pool of blood as she lay dying?”

“How do you know this? You weren’t there.” Desperation crept into his voice as memories flowed, unbidden.

“I saw it all, Papa. I heard her voice, pleading to no avail, telling my brother to run and hide.”

“Please stop. I still hear his screams at night. My dreams carry me along a river of blood.”

“But you still dream, Papa. A luxury they no longer possess. Why did you treat me differently? Perhaps that is the question I’d like to ask most of all.”

Anger overcame fear now, hatred rose above all other considerations. “Is that why you’ve come here, to seek the answer? All right. You are the essence of your mother’s betrayal. I found I couldn’t live the lie, studying your face each day, wondering who stared back at me.”

“Rest your hand against my brother’s tiny headstone, Papa. Why did he feel your revenge?”

“My son…so much blood. For that I weep.” He fought against the vision called up before him.

“And for Mama? Is there not even one tear for her?”

“What do you want from me?”

“I would think the answer obvious, Papa. I’ve brought you here to join us. Do you see Mama, her throat slashed by your hand? And Brother, his nightclothes stained with the blood you spilled? Can you see me, Papa? Can you see the gaping hole in my chest, the emptiness within? Lay your head down upon my grave and rest. We’ve been waiting to embrace you.”


23 thoughts:

Laura Eno said...

Thanks for posting my story, Hannah! Great contest!

Anne said...

ha! awesome

Sam said...

Chilling! And good, so very, very good.

Dominic de Mattos said...

Wonderfully written!

Really excellent.

:Dom

Erin Cole said...

I thought my family was messed up. Wicked penning, Laura. Love it.
tsk, tsk, tsk Papa ;)

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Ghostly revenge! Good entry, Laura.

Terry Stonecrop said...

This moved fast. Really good! Love the twist ending:)

Mike Robertson said...

I really like the way you reveal his crimes a little at a time, and finally the reason for them. Gee, it warms my heart to see a family reunited like that! ;-)

Laura Eno said...

Anne - Thanks!
Sam - Sorry for the extra chill. ;)
Dominic - Thank you!
Erin - They had their fair share of skeletons in the closet. :)
Alex - I love ghostly revenge!
Terry - Thanks!
Mike - The ultimate family reunion... ;)

Cynthia Schuerr said...

Delightfully creepy, Laura! AND of course, so well written, as always.:-)

Ann Best said...

Congrats to Laura. This IS a creepy story; well written!!

Hannah: I've signed in again as a follower. For some reason you're not coming up on my blogroll. So I'm trying again! You and your blog are beautiful!!
Ann

Sheila Deeth said...

Wow. Very chilling reunion.

Dangerous With a Pen said...

Woooo, chills!

Laura Eno said...

Cynthia - Delightfully creepy...I like that!
Ann - Thanks for the creepy vote!
Sheila - Not a reunion I'd care for!
Dangerous with a pen - I'm happy to have given you chills!

Helen Ginger said...

Wonderfully creepy.

Laura Eno said...

Thanks, Helen!

Carol Kilgore said...

Somehow I missed this until now. I love this story, Laura. It has a lot of depth, and I think it could be made into a wonderful movie. Maybe someone with connections will think that, too :)

Laura Eno said...

Thanks, Carol! A movie...I like that!

ganymeder said...

Creeeepy. Yeah, reading this at bedtime might have been a mistake...

Laura Eno said...

Thanks, Catherine! :) Right at bedtime...not a good idea.

Laura Eno said...

Thanks, Catherine! :) Right at bedtime...not a good idea.

Theres just life said...

Wow, very creepy. Ah well its nice to see Papa finally made it home to the family.
Hannah love the look of your blog and thank you for posting this story.

Laura Eno said...

Pam - Yes, Papa made it home...LOL! Hannah's blog is beautiful!

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